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Octavia heard the late-night bar long before she even laid eyes on it. It was exactly what she expected to be open at such a late time in the night. The dull thud of the bass reminded Octavia of a Pilohippus banging rocks together, and probably carried the same calibre of musical finesse with it. She spotted a young colt pointing a hoof at her as she waited outside, his friends chuckling amongst themselves. They had absolutely no chance of being let in; manes spiked with gel, hoofs shod with trainers, and dressed in trashy tracksuits that Octavia imagined must be really, 'hip,' with these types of vagrants.

Octavia herself, on the other hoof, had no issues with entry. She casually trotted to the bouncers attending the door, smiling and bowing her head slightly. She raised the cello case and nodded at the doorway, and the bouncers parted. It crossed her mind that the bouncers must have assumed she was part of the music setup, but hadn't realised there was no orchestral involvement in the thudding uproar she could hear. She hoped this indicated the possibility of a more cultured ensemble taking over the music later on.

Octavia managed one last glance, punctuated with a haughty smile, at the little rodent colt, who's jaw was parted wide with shock. The sight only stretched her smile further as she entered into the club. Although, in hindsight, she was glad the gangster pony days had ended. If this club allowed anypony with a violin case to trot right in, it couldn't have been safe otherwise.

She navigated her way through the narrow corridor leading from the entrance, delicately stepping over an inebriated, and probably unconscious, filly before entering into the club proper. The pulse of the strobe lights she had attempted to prepare herself for almost blinded her, like a flash-bang spell. She barely managed to stop herself toppling over onto a couple sitting near the door, who were similarly paralytic to the filly in the hallway.

Octavia righted herself, her eyes vainly attempting to get up to speed with the situation and clarify the proceedings for her. Both sound and vision were assaulted with rhythmic booms. Flares of light and heavy thuds attacked Octavia's senses. She had just came here for a drink. Order one, pay the bill, and sit in a corner. As far from the titanic sub-woofers as possible. She ignored the spiky-maned colts who were - despite looking like they'd barely earned their cutie marks - heading up the entrance corridor behind her. Their cat calls were devoured in the fog of the music as she pushed through the crowd to the bar.

It transpired that after a fervent hoofful of minutes spent yelling over the bass, Octavia found herself sitting in an otherwise unoccupied corner, sipping a glass of Buck Daniels and cursing the utter lack of any class in this place.

The moment she had arrived at the bar, the barcolt had looked at her and implied.

"A classy filly like you'd drink pina coladas, right?"

Octavia's shocked expression must have told him all he needed to know. That he'd believe she'd drink that trampony's urine disguised as foals' orange juice was beyond her. He apologetically offered her the Buck Daniels on the house, it being the only whiskey he stocked, and Octavia felt it barely qualified. She had taken her leave with a polite, but sharp, thank you, forging her way through the tightly-packed crowd to her seat in the corner.

Octavia now found that most of her vehement glaring was now directed at the DJ coordinating the attack on her eardrums. The bassy undertones were cut up with wavering yet harsh overtones of electromagical music. The sort of ethereal, strange noises no physical instrument could make. That no sane pony would want to hear, Octavia felt. She bitterly swilled a sip of the vulgar whiskey pass-off. Once more, she felt the night wasn't turning how she wanted. What she had wanted was a quiet, wind-down session with some tasteful alcohol and silence. She had instead been given cheap pigswill and ear-invasive thuds. She further focused her irritation at the music, a screeching mass of fluttering magical tones and notes. It had no class, no refinement, no skill at all!

Though that being the case...why was her hindleg bobbing in time with the beats?

She suppressed the treacherous limb, and instead focused her attention on the DJ creating the noise. Her shimmering white coat, the crude cyan mane streaked with electric blue, the eyes hidden away behind lustrous, purple shades that glimmered like jewels in the pulsing light. Her head rocked back in forth in time with the music she created, hooves working a frenzy on the tape decks as her mane whipped back and forth with her head. Octavia assumed she compensated for lack of precision with speed and pure volume.

A pair of mares caught Octavia's attention a table over. One was an exuberant pink filly with candy-floss like hair, the other an irritated sky-blue pegasus garnished with a rainbow mane and tail. Octavia watched as the pink mare tried to drag her unwilling friend by the hoof, presumably into the crowd. The pegasus, of course, was having none of it, at least until the pink one planted a kiss on her cheek, causing the pegasus' wings to burst out from her back. The incident knocked a passer-by to their hooves. A flustered motion of apologetic help from the embarrassed pegasus was blended with the pink filly's giggles, before the pair dissolved into the crowd to avoid any more mishaps.

It was at that moment that realisation washed over Octavia. She hadn't actually given thought to the bar's name, simply beelining for the door in search of a calm drink. However, it was only now she looked at the bar mats for the drink glasses.

'Fillyfools,' how quaint. Well, Octavia would do her best to get her drinks and leave before anything like that happened. She was a modern pony, and had no issue with it, of course. Unless a pony hoped it involved her, then she would happily evade any attempts.

She turned her irritated and flustered attention to the DJ once more. It was then she noticed the glasses turn towards her midway through another spirited headbang. A glow of white magic enveloped them, and Octavia saw a pair of red eyes crest the horizon of the spectacles as they were lowered. The red eyes behind them seemed to pierce the fog of special effect and cigarette smoke, staring straight at Octavia's own.  A grin unfolded over the DJ's face, and the glasses were once more lifted to cover her eyes, her headbanging now only succeeded by the riot that had developed in the crowd. Octavia noticed the security guards were making no attempt to restrain the rowdy, 'audience.' Typical. The look in the DJ's eyes intrigued Octavia. She had expected, if anything, contempt from the trendier mare playing the decks.

However, Octavia wasn't entirely sure contempt was what the eyes were trying to convey.
Octavia's quest for a simple glass of some quality liquor takes her to a late-night bar. Will she have fun amongst the young and trendy populace of the bar? Will she find somepony special to take home? Will she finally get her lips on that smoky Jura she's been hankering for?

I dunno. I was half-asleep writing this. Could be a bloody Gears of War crossover for all I know.

Chapter Three:
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:iconcaramel-dixon:
caramel-dixon Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
NO. NO PINKIEDASH. NO NO NO.

But I love the story. :D
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MitsukiAdored Featured By Owner May 16, 2012
I LOVED the eye contact scene! Very nicely done! Can't wait to see how this goes! ;)
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Mrslap86 Featured By Owner May 7, 2012
piña colada :P
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:iconcoffeegrunt:
CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner May 8, 2012
Mm?
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Mrslap86 Featured By Owner May 22, 2012
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Piña Colada xD
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WintersWhiteWolf Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I OFFICALLY FUCKING LOVE THIS STORY AND COFFEE! U MY FRIEND ARE EPICALLY AWESOME! KEEP BEING EPICLY AWESOME!
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x3z8 Featured By Owner Mar 2, 2012
I want to be in that night club so fucking bad!
Loved this story from start to finish!
Amazing work, best Vinyltavia ever!
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DravenEclipse Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Wow this is the first MLP fanfic that I have actually read. I find myself really enjoying it. Also, the rainbow dash part was adorable.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012
Glad to hear you're enjoying it, hope its stays like that.
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
I've heard of this. Now I'm reading it.

My eyes are gonna hurt by the end of this.

:la:

Let it continue!
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:iconcoffeegrunt:
CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
Enjoy!
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
And I am. Lulz
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:iconwolfking164:
Wolfking164 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012
I shall. ^__^

I is already liking it too!
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deathnotefan88 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, this is really well written

though, your choice in RainbowPie shipping does have me a little disappointed, never liked that pairing, which is weird, they are tied for my second fav mane 6
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Biglol4ever Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
this story is very good i know its not the mainpoint but i dont like pinkiedash but awkward wingboners of course :3
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Lorhechapol Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011
idk if you know this coffee, but Jura isn't exactly the end-all be-all of reasonably priced whiskey
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:iconcoffeegrunt:
CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
Well...yeah.

Whatever made you think I believed the opposite?
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:iconlorhechapol:
Lorhechapol Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
Just the fact that you implemented Octavia's "fine taste" to include mediocre whiskey.
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:iconcoffeegrunt:
CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2011
Yup.

Honestly, mate. I couldn't care less. Everyone on here is fully aware that I know nothing about alcohol or music.

Also, all whiskey tastes like paint thinner to me.
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Lorhechapol Featured By Owner Dec 15, 2011
Oh, My mistake. I assume you wanted to make your work a little accurate.

My Mistake.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
I don't get what you're trying to achieve.

If you don't like the fic, leave. I have 500 people and counting who do like it, I'll happily hang out with those guys.

Because if there's one thing I've learned, you don't need to know anything, only sound like you know anything. Hell, the entire concept of Electrical Retail is built on telling the customer exactly what they want to hear about a TV using numbers on a specification sheet to make it sound like proof.

Basically, 99% of people simply do not care. Sad and disappointing, I know, but it sucks to be the 1% when everyone around you just goes "Eh" to your opinion.
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Lorhechapol Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2011
I'm not trying to 'achieve' anything. It just suprises and fustrates me that you react so negatively to a fan pointing out a relatively small inconsistency.

I never once stated I dislike this fanfic either, It's one of the better ones i've read.

Just wished you'd put some effort into those details.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2011
I'm not reacting negatively, just soemwhat neutrally-come-lackadaisically...

Well, the problem is Jura being good is derived from taste, which is derived from the personal tongue, which is derived from opinion.

Therefore, it is hard to pick one whiskey that is both recognisable and good. Also, this part was written back when Allegrezza was nothing more than a throwaway side project. I don't really see the need to change the brand, is all.

It's inconsequential given that references after chapter five are few and far between.
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Fyre-Medi Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2011
:( I like Buck Daniels. ;)
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:iconcoffeegrunt:
CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2011
I don't like whiskey in general. Pear cider, bro. Sweet, and has less of the after taste apple cider carries.
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Rahlyn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Spire Apple Cider fan myself, though when it comes to the hard stuff, I love my tequila.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012
Never heard of it, must be a US brand?
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:iconrahlyn:
Rahlyn Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Correct. Best I've tried, though there are still plenty of brands left to get my hands on.
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Shawnay631 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011
"She ignored the spiky-haired colts who had - despite all reason, and looking like they'd barely earned their cutie marks - were now heading up the entrance corridor behind her."
Doesn't really make sense when you break it down. The way I broke it down was "She ignored the spiky-haired colts who had were not heading up the entrance corridor." And I feel like there is a less awkward way to state how young they are. The middle just sounds kind of awkward to me.

"The barcolt had looked at her and implied, "a classy filly like you'd drink pina coladas, right?" Octavia's shocked expression must have told him all he needed to know."
Did he imply this, or say this?


""Fillyfools," how quaint"
This seems like all of her thoughts, so maybe it should all be italicized?
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Rarityfan Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
no comma after "inebriated"
The only thing else that bothers me are the words: "DJ pony." That's like saying "DJ person" All you need to say is DJ. DJ pony is like disc jockey pony
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ArcticFox501 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
my god this is good i need to read more
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ArcLightKey Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah okay, if this is a GoW crossover then MLP is... MLP... compared to this... does that make sense?
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j1u2l3i4e5 Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2011
I love PinkieDash! Also, I'm guessing this fic is going to feature a pairing that I'm allso rather fond of.
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Rysonn Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2011  Student Writer
love it, damn this is good!
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JimFaindel Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
The story is great my friend, but that crossover comment on the description always make me chuckle.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2011
Since writing this, someone actually wrote a GoW crossover...

I have yet to read it.
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DooDawDay Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This story was recommended to me quite some time ago. I am somewhat disappointed in my self that it has taken me this long to get to it. I love where this is going! Part two and I'm already hooked!
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
:iconfluttershyyayplz:

There's a whole thirteen other chapters after this one!
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DooDawDay Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm on ten now ^^
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2011
I noticed. :P
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unitoone Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh Pinkie Pie, you are so random =)

I like the story so far.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2011
Thanks, and yeh, I felt a little DashiePie would've been fun to write in. :D
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Sh4dowSentinel Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
YOU! I wanna take you to a gay bar! Lets start a war! Start a nuclear war! AT THE GAY BAR, GAY BAR, GAY BAR!!
(Love that song.)
Well this is awesome! I love the Pinkie/Dash :squee:
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011
I'll pass on the invite, but thanks for the positive comment.

And yeh, I had to sneak everyone's favourite ship in somewhere.
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Sh4dowSentinel Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
:iconfluttershyyayplz:
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Zogger568 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2011  Student Writer
Excellent.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2011
I'll get round to writing the 3rd chapter at some point this week. :D
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TheUnrealChrichan Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome. I totally skipped over your latest fic because I'm not a fan of Halo, but this looks really promising so far.
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CoffeeGrunt Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2011
Glad to hear, I'm having a good bit of fun just writing it as it goes. As far as the Halo fic, I tried to write it for non-Halo fans, but sprinkle the odd quote or reference for Halo fans too.

If it makes you feel better, apparently the Halo MLP group on Bungie don't like it. XD
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Qaxis Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2011
I'm really enjoying this, even is just something you're writing for yourself. Its kind of relaxing.
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